Peer Evaluation 20119 정찬

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점을 주고 싶다. 굉장히 잘 짜여진 구조와 논리를 가지고 있는 글이다. 

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
Final Draft에서 만점을 받기 위해선 이 구조와 논리를 가지고 가되, Introduction의 정보를 주는 부분을 Narration부분에 넣었으면 좋겠다.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
 I think that we need to have a right th decide not to have intensive care and to choose their own death.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
yes
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
SameAny other thoughts?
nope
Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
yes
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Nope, I think it is too long.
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
yes
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
yes
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

nope, it is too weak

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I think that conclusion has a weak argument.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
disagree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
disagree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
nope, just my mind is so hard to change

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
the essay was good.


Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
yes

Are the sources obvious?
yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes


Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
nope