2014년 11월 30일 일요일

20117 이준우 Final Draft

Sarah Mae Sincero says that Most of your physical features can be identified as identical to that of your parents, like your eyes from your father, and the hair color from your mother. It means that nature is influenced to your physical features. However, your personality and talents may have come not from your father or mother. The environment where you grew up may have a lasting effect or influence on that way you talk, behave and respond to the things around you( (Sep 16, 2012). Nature and Nurture Debate.) Many psychologists have debated a matter of which one is more influenced between nature and nurture in shaping human behavior for a long time. About this matter, they debated for a long time. With this matter, through three reasons, I argue that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

Now, I will explain the information about the nature to understand my articles. In psychology, nature is defined that human development is determined by his DNA. The coding of genes determines the different traits that we have, more dominantly on the physical attributes like eye color, hair color, ear size, height, and other traits. However, psychologists still didn't recognize whether the more abstract attributes like personality, intelligence, sexual orientation is from the nature( (Sep 16, 2012). Nature and Nurture Debate). Even if psychologists still didn't recognize whether the more abstract attributes, there is a example supported the nature theory. For instance, There are studies that the genetic and environmental influences on Childhood obesity. A systematic review of twin and adoption studies(K. Silventoinen, B. Rokholm, J. Kaprio, The genetic and environmental influences on childhood obesity: a systematic review of twin and adoption studies, 15 September 2009) is researched by K. Silventoinen, B. Rokholm, J. Kaprio. In their systematic review, They identified nine twin and five adoption studies; all of these studies had used relative weight as an indicator of obesity. Through their meta analysis of these twin studies, they said, "Genetic factors had a strong effect on the variation of body mass index (BMI) at all ages. The common environmental factors showed a substantial effect in mid-childhood, but this effect disappeared at adolescence. Adoption studies supported the role of family environment in childhood obesity as correlations were found between adoptees and adoptive parents; however, correlations were substantially stronger between parents and their biological offspring, further supporting the importance of genetic factors."
From now on, I will explain the narration for the nurture theory. Sarah Mae Sincero says, "The nurture theory holds that the environmental factors are the real origins of our behavior. This includes the use of conditioning in order to induce a new behavior to a child, or alter an unlikely behavior being shown by the child( (Sep 16, 2012). Nature and Nurture Debate). 

Here is one of social learning theories. It is not only the example for the narration of nurture, but also my first contention. Albert Bandura (1977) states, behavior is learned from the environment through the process of observational learning. Bandura (1977) argued that humans are active information processors and think about the relationship between their behavior and its consequences. Observational learning could not occur unless cognitive processes were at work. Children observe the people around them behaving in various ways. This is illustrated during the famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). Individuals that are observed are called models. In society children are surrounded by many influential models, such as parents within the family, characters on children’s TV, friends within their peer group and teachers at school. Theses models provide examples of behavior to observe and imitate, e.g. masculine and feminine, pro and anti-social etc. Children pay attention to some of these people (models) and encode their behavior. At a later time they may imitate (i.e. copy) the behavior they have observed. They may do this regardless of whether the behavior is ‘gender appropriate’ or not but there are a number of processes that make it more likely that a child will reproduce the behavior that its society deems appropriate for its sex. First, the child is more likely to attend to and imitate those people it perceives as similar to itself. Consequently, it is more likely to imitate behavior modeled by people of the same sex. Second, the people around the child will respond to the behavior it imitates with either reinforcement or punishment.  If a child imitates a model’s behavior and the consequences are rewarding, the child is likely to continue performing the behavior.  If parent sees a little girl consoling her teddy bear and says “what a kind girl you are”, this is rewarding for the child and makes it more likely that she will repeat the behavior.  Her behavior has been reinforced (i.e. strengthened). Reinforcement can be external or internal and can be positive or negative.  If a child wants approval from parents or peers, this approval is an external reinforcement, but feeling happy about being approved of is an internal reinforcement.  A child will behave in a way which it believes will earn approval because it desires approval. Positive (or negative) reinforcement will have little impact if the reinforcement offered externally does not match with an individual's needs.  Reinforcement can be positive or negative, but the important factor is that it will usually lead to a change in a person's behavior. Third, the child will also take into account of what happens to other people when deciding whether or not to copy someone’s actions.  This is known as vicarious reinforcement. This relates to attachment to specific models that possess qualities seen as rewarding. Children will have a number of models with whom they identify. These may be people in their immediate world, such as parents or elder siblings, or could be fantasy characters or people in the media. The motivation to identify with a particular model is that they have a quality which the individual would like to possess. Identification occurs with another person (the model) and involves taking on (or adopting) observed behaviors, values, beliefs and attitudes of the person with whom you are(identifying.http://www.simplypsychology.org/bobo-doll.html). Albert Bandura, one of the greatest psychologists, argued that the nurture has more influenced to the human behavior. Bobo doll experiments supported not only his arguments, but also my arguments. 

Secondly, Mencius' story confirms my argument through the real example. There was a Mencius and his mother. They were living in the near around the common grave. Mencius who has no friend to play with, played holding funerals, which was seen by him. His mother observing this situation decided to move to a market, because the situation is not proper for his life style. Then, He tried to play selling the products, following the merchants or businessman trading with the people. His mother also decided to move, realizing that this place is not good to live. In this time, she decided to move to where is near the school(seodang). In the place to which they had moved, Mencius started to learn the tradition of courtesy and ancestral rites and the way of studying or bowing. When watching him, His mother realized that this place which is around the school is the best place to grow him up. This story suggest that the place is influencing the humans' behaviors. 

A word of criminal also confirm my argument. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. When I read this, I realized that negative environments make person bad. However, there is a positive impacts of nurture. There are a lot of people that success from bottom to the top. Even if they are suffered by poverty, they tried a lot to escape the poverty rather than to give up. In addition, There are a lot of underground musicians who just like the music. Although they have no money to eat and make musics, no fame and even no place to sing, they didn't stop their music life. Their environments are bad, but, through out their conditions, they tried hard to live or earn money. Through these supports, It is proved that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic

 A systematic review of twin and adoption studies(K. Silventoinen, B. Rokholm, J. Kaprio, The genetic and environmental influences on childhood obesity: a systematic review of twin and adoption studies, 15 September 2009) is researched by K. Silventoinen, B. Rokholm, J. Kaprio. In their systematic review, They identified nine twin and five adoption studies; all of these studies had used relative weight as an indicator of obesity. Through their meta analysis of these twin studies, they said, "Genetic factors had a strong effect on the variation of body mass index (BMI) at all ages. The common environmental factors showed a substantial effect in mid-childhood, but this effect disappeared at adolescence. Adoption studies supported the role of family environment in childhood obesity as correlations were found between adoptees and adoptive parents; however, correlations were substantially stronger between parents and their biological offspring, further supporting the importance of genetic factors." This is the refutation for my argument. However, This has a flaw that the common environmental factors' effects disappeared at adolescence. The common environmental factors didn't disappear, It is just internalized by the other environments. It seems like disappeared, such as adaptation for the MCH.

Perhaps one of the challenges to discussing this topic is how to prove that the nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic. There is a related theory that proves my argument. Bandura's (1977) social learning theory states that aggression is a learnt from the environment through observation and imitation. This is seen in his famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). This saying refers to the legend that Mencius's mother moved house three times before finding a location that she felt was suitable for the child's upbringing. As an expression, the idiom refers to the importance of finding the proper environment for raising children. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. Through this supports, I think that nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

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2014년 11월 29일 토요일

Peer Evaluation 20120 조윤지

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점을 주고 싶다. 굉장히 잘 짜여진 구조와 논리를 가지고 있는 글이다. 

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
Great essay. but your argument is not persuasive. I think it is just argument.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
 I think that personality is partly innate, not entirely acquired.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
I think,....not....:)
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
I think personality is innate or acquired.
Any other thoughts?
nope

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
yes
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
yesDoes the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
yes
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
yes
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
yes


What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I dont have it

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
disagree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
disagree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
nope, just my mind is so hard to change

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
the essay was good.


Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
yes

Are the sources obvious?
yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes


Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
nope

Peer Evaluation 20119 정찬

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점을 주고 싶다. 굉장히 잘 짜여진 구조와 논리를 가지고 있는 글이다. 

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
Final Draft에서 만점을 받기 위해선 이 구조와 논리를 가지고 가되, Introduction의 정보를 주는 부분을 Narration부분에 넣었으면 좋겠다.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
 I think that we need to have a right th decide not to have intensive care and to choose their own death.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
yes
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
SameAny other thoughts?
nope
Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
yes
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Nope, I think it is too long.
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
yes
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
yes
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

nope, it is too weak

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I think that conclusion has a weak argument.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
disagree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
disagree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
nope, just my mind is so hard to change

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
the essay was good.


Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
yes

Are the sources obvious?
yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes


Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
nope

2014년 11월 16일 일요일

20117 이준우 Second Draft

Nurture makes your characteristic

Most of your physical features can be identified as identical to that of your parents, like your eyes from your father, and the hair color from your mother. It means that nature is influenced to your physical features. However, your personality and talents may have come not from your father or mother. The environment where you grew up may have a lasting effect or influence on that way you talk, behave and respond to the things around you( (Sep 16, 2012). Nature and Nurture Debate.
https://explorable.com/nature-vs-nurture-debate). Many psychologists have debated a matter of which one is more influenced between nature and nurture in shaping human behavior for a long time. About this matter they debated for a long time. However, I think that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

Nature is defined that human development is predisposed in his DNA. The coding of genes in each cell in us humans determine the different traits that we have, more dominantly on the physical attributes like eye color, hair color, ear size, height, and other traits. However, it is still not known whether the more abstract attributes like personality, intelligence, sexual orientation( (Sep 16, 2012). Nature and Nurture Debate. https://explorable.com/nature-vs-nurture-debate).

The nurture theory holds that genetic influence over abstract traits may exist; however, the environmental factors are the real origins of our behavior. This includes the use of conditioning in order to induce a new behavior to a child, or alter an unlikely behavior being shown by the child. According to John Watson, one of the strongest psychologists who propose environmental learning as a dominating side in the nature vs nurture debate, once said that he can be able to train a baby randomly chosen in a group of 12 infants, to become any type of specialist Watson wants. He stated that he could train him to be such regardless of the child's potentialities, talents and race. Although it is true that fraternal twins raised apart have remarkable similarities in most respects, still the intervention of the environment have caused several differences in the way they behave ( (Sep 16, 2012). Nature and Nurture Debate. https://explorable.com/nature-vs-nurture-debate).

Personality is a frequently cited example of a heritable trait that has been studied in twins and adoptions. Identical twins reared apart are far more similar in personality than randomly selected pairs of people. Likewise, identical twins are more similar than fraternal twins. Also, biological siblings are more similar in personality than adoptive siblings. Each observation suggests that personality is heritable to a certain extent. However, these same study designs allow for the examination of environment as well as genes. Adoption studies also directly measure the strength of shared family effects. Adopted siblings share only family environment. Unexpectedly, some adoption studies indicate that by adulthood the personalities of adopted siblings are no more similar than random pairs of strangers. This would mean that shared family effects on personality wane off by adulthood. As is the case with personality, non-shared environmental effects are often found to out-weigh shared environmental effects. That is, environmental effects that are typically thought to be life-shaping (such as family life) may have less of an impact than non-shared effects, which are harder to identify.

In social learning theory Albert Bandura (1977) states behavior is learned from the environment through the process of observational learning. Unlike Skinner, Bandura (1977) believes that humans are active information processors and think about the relationship between their behavior and its consequences. Observational learning could not occur unless cognitive processes were at work. Children observe the people around them behaving in various ways. This is illustrated during the famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). Individuals that are observed are called models. In society children are surrounded by many influential models, such as parents within the family, characters on children’s TV, friends within their peer group and teachers at school. Theses models provide examples of behavior to observe and imitate, e.g. masculine and feminine, pro and anti-social etc. Children pay attention to some of these people (models) and encode their behavior. At a later time they may imitate (i.e. copy) the behavior they have observed. They may do this regardless of whether the behavior is ‘gender appropriate’ or not but there are a number of processes that make it more likely that a child will reproduce the behavior that its society deems appropriate for its sex. First, the child is more likely to attend to and imitate those people it perceives as similar to itself. Consequently, it is more likely to imitate behavior modeled by people of the same sex. Second, the people around the child will respond to the behavior it imitates with either reinforcement or punishment.  If a child imitates a model’s behavior and the consequences are rewarding, the child is likely to continue performing the behavior.  If parent sees a little girl consoling her teddy bear and says “what a kind girl you are”, this is rewarding for the child and makes it more likely that she will repeat the behavior.  Her behavior has been reinforced (i.e. strengthened). Reinforcement can be external or internal and can be positive or negative.  If a child wants approval from parents or peers, this approval is an external reinforcement, but feeling happy about being approved of is an internal reinforcement.  A child will behave in a way which it believes will earn approval because it desires approval. Positive (or negative) reinforcement will have little impact if the reinforcement offered externally does not match with an individual's needs.  Reinforcement can be positive or negative, but the important factor is that it will usually lead to a change in a person's behavior. Third, the child will also take into account of what happens to other people when deciding whether or not to copy someone’s actions.  This is known as vicarious reinforcement. This relates to attachment to specific models that possess qualities seen as rewarding. Children will have a number of models with whom they identify. These may be people in their immediate world, such as parents or elder siblings, or could be fantasy characters or people in the media. The motivation to identify with a particular model is that they have a quality which the individual would like to possess. Identification occurs with another person (the model) and involves taking on (or adopting) observed behaviors, values, beliefs and attitudes of the person with whom you are identifying.

This story confirm my argument through the real example. This saying refers to the legend that Mencius's mother moved house three times before finding a location that she felt was suitable for the child's upbringing. As an expression, the idiom refers to the importance of finding the proper environment for raising children. Mencius's father died when he was very young. His mother raised her son alone. They were very poor. At first they lived by a cemetery, where the mother found her son imitating the paid mourners in funeral processions. Therefore the mother decided to move. The next house was near a market in the town. There the boy began to imitate the cries of merchants (merchants were despised in early China). So the mother moved to a house next to a school. Inspired by the scholars and students, Mencius began to study. His mother decided to remain, and Mencius became a scholar. This story means that nurture is more influenced than the nature(http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=1168439&cid=40942&categoryId=32972).

A word of criminal also confirm my argument. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. 
Through these supports, It is proved that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic(http://blog.naver.com/ddoo97/90102343712).

Counterpoising genetics and environmental influences is somewhat misleading, despite the partisan claims of people on each side. Many human traits and behaviors result from both genetic and environmental factors. Moreover, genetic and environmental influences on a trait are not simply additive. Genes “interact” with the environment. That is, genes provide the potential for a trait, but environmental conditions determine whether that potential will be realized. The same genetic codes may be expressed at different levels in different environments. Compare, for example, Asian immigrants in the United States to U.S.–born Asian Americans. U.S.–born Asians are twice as likely as immigrants to suffer from prostate cancer, and Asian-American adolescents born in the United States are more than twice as likely to be obese as Asian-American adolescents who recently immigrated to the United States. U.S.–born Asians and immigrant Asians are likely to have similar genetic predispositions for prostate cancer and obesity. The differences between the two groups in the prevalence of these disorders are, therefore, likely to be caused by environmental conditions such as lifestyle and diet. To understand gene-by environment
interactions, we must evaluate the estimated heritability of traits in particular environments. The term heritability is often misunderstood. The traditional twin study design generally produces a single heritability estimate. Heritability, however, is not a fixed property of a trait; it could vary from one population to another. For example, under different social circumstances, the heritability for cognitive development may differ. We could make one estimate of heritability based on a U.S. middle-class population and another based on a low-caste population in India. We would expect the former to be significantly larger than the latter. In a modern liberal democracy, individuals enjoy more access to educational opportunities than in a traditional aristocratic society. As a result, the differences in cognitive achievement in a modern democracy should be due more to genetic differences than in a traditional society. An egalitarian, democratic society can be thought of as a “normal” environment for estimating the heritability of cognitive development, where the “genetic potential” for cognitive development can be realized. We can compare heritability in a traditional or more hierarchical society against this potential.


Perhaps one of the challenges to discussing this topic is how to prove that the nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic. There is a related theory that proves my argument. Bandura's (1977) social learning theory states that aggression is a learnt from the environment through observation and imitation. This is seen in his famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). This saying refers to the legend that Mencius's mother moved house three times before finding a location that she felt was suitable for the child's upbringing. As an expression, the idiom refers to the importance of finding the proper environment for raising children. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. Through this supports, I think that nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

Bibliography




2014년 10월 26일 일요일

20117 이준우 Self Evaluation

Self Evaluation Template

1) What score do you think you deserve? Here is the rubric:
2 points - The first draft is thoughtful and a good start to an effective persuasive essay. It demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument.
1 point - The student completes a first draft that demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument
0 points - The first draft is inadequate
I think I deserve 1 point. I included the 5 elements of a classical argument. However, My argument is not clear and logic.

2) What did you do well?
I think that I did found information well. My information is specific and proper to my argument.

3) What could you have done better?
I could have done thought better. I would like to think about my logic and argument.
4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?
I think my best part of the classical argument is the narration.
5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?
I think that conclusion is the poorest part in my argument.

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better? 
Thinking more about the topic and Planning the working. 

20117 이준우 First Draft Essay

Your physical features can be identified as identical to that of your parents, like your eyes from your father, and the hair color from your mother. Therefore, nature is defined that human development is predisposed in his DNA.However, your personality and talents may have come not from your father or mother. The environment where you grew up may have a lasting effect or influence on that way you talk, behave and respond to the things around you. Therefore, nurture is defined that human development is influenced by life experience and his environment. Many psychologists have debated a matter of which one is more influenced between nature and nurture in shaping human behavior for a long time. About this matter debated for a long time. I think that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

The coding of genes in each cell in us humans determine the different traits that we have, more dominantly on the physical attributes like eye color, hair color, ear size, height, and other traits. However, it is still not known whether the more abstract attributes like personality, intelligence, sexual orientation, likes and dislikes are gene-coded in our DNA, too. One of the hottest issues against nature theory is that there may be an existing "gay gene", which explains that gays are actually born that way. Another issue is that the criminal acts, tendency to divorce and aggressive behavior causing abuse can be justified by the "behavioral genes" once the researchers have proven their existence.
On the other hand, the behavioral genes are somewhat proven to exist when we take a look at fraternal twins. When fraternal twins are reared apart, they show the same similarities in behavior and response as if they have been reared together.

The nurture theory holds that genetic influence over abstract traits may exist; however, the environmental factors are the real origins of our behavior. This includes the use of conditioning in order to induce a new behavior to a child, or alter an unlikely behavior being shown by the child. According to John Watson, one of the strongest psychologists who propose environmental learning as a dominating side in the nature vs nurture debate, once said that he can be able to train a baby randomly chosen in a group of 12 infants, to become any type of specialist Watson wants. He stated that he could train him to be such regardless of the child's potentialities, talents and race. Although it is true that fraternal twins raised apart have remarkable similarities in most respects, still the intervention of the environment have caused several differences in the way they behave.

Personality is a frequently cited example of a heritable trait that has been studied in twins and adoptions. Identical twins reared apart are far more similar in personality than randomly selected pairs of people. Likewise, identical twins are more similar than fraternal twins. Also, biological siblings are more similar in personality than adoptive siblings. Each observation suggests that personality is heritable to a certain extent. However, these same study designs allow for the examination of environment as well as genes. Adoption studies also directly measure the strength of shared family effects. Adopted siblings share only family environment. Unexpectedly, some adoption studies indicate that by adulthood the personalities of adopted siblings are no more similar than random pairs of strangers. This would mean that shared family effects on personality wane off by adulthood. As is the case with personality, non-shared environmental effects are often found to out-weigh shared environmental effects. That is, environmental effects that are typically thought to be life-shaping (such as family life) may have less of an impact than non-shared effects, which are harder to identify.


In social learning theory Albert Bandura (1977) states behavior is learned from the environment through the process of observational learning. Unlike Skinner, Bandura (1977) believes that humans are active information processors and think about the relationship between their behavior and its consequences. Observational learning could not occur unless cognitive processes were at work.Children observe the people around them behaving in various ways. This is illustrated during the famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961).Individuals that are observed are called models. In society children are surrounded by many influential models, such as parents within the family, characters on children’s TV, friends within their peer group and teachers at school.  Theses models provide examples of behavior to observe and imitate, e.g. masculine and feminine, pro and anti-social etc. Children pay attention to some of these people (models) and encode their behavior.  At a later time they may imitate (i.e. copy) the behavior they have observed.  They may do this regardless of whether the behavior is ‘gender appropriate’ or not but there are a number of processes that make it more likely that a child will reproduce the behavior that its society deems appropriate for its sex.

Perhaps one of the challenges to discussing this topic is how to prove that the nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic. There is a related theory that proves my argument. Bandura's (1977) social learning theory states that aggression is a learnt from the environment through observation and imitation. This is seen in his famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). Also Skinner (1957) believed that language is learnt from other people via behavior shaping techniques.
First, the child is more likely to attend to and imitate those people it perceives as similar to itself. Consequently, it is more likely to imitate behavior modeled by people of the same sex. Second, the people around the child will respond to the behavior it imitates with either reinforcement or punishment.  If a child imitates a model’s behavior and the consequences are rewarding, the child is likely to continue performing the behavior.  If parent sees a little girl consoling her teddy bear and says “what a kind girl you are”, this is rewarding for the child and makes it more likely that she will repeat the behavior.  Her behavior has been reinforced (i.e. strengthened). Reinforcement can be external or internal and can be positive or negative.  If a child wants approval from parents or peers, this approval is an external reinforcement, but feeling happy about being approved of is an internal reinforcement.  A child will behave in a way which it believes will earn approval because it desires approval. Positive (or negative) reinforcement will have little impact if the reinforcement offered externally does not match with an individual's needs.  Reinforcement can be positive or negative, but the important factor is that it will usually lead to a change in a person's behavior. Third, the child will also take into account of what happens to other people when deciding whether or not to copy someone’s actions.  This is known as vicarious reinforcement. This relates to attachment to specific models that possess qualities seen as rewarding. Children will have a number of models with whom they identify. These may be people in their immediate world, such as parents or elder siblings, or could be fantasy characters or people in the media. The motivation to identify with a particular model is that they have a quality which the individual would like to possess. Identification occurs with another person (the model) and involves taking on (or adopting) observed behaviors, values, beliefs and attitudes of the person with whom you are identifying.

This story confirm my argument through the real example. This saying refers to the legend that Mencius's mother moved house three times before finding a location that she felt was suitable for the child's upbringing. As an expression, the idiom refers to the importance of finding the proper environment for raising children. Mencius's father died when he was very young. His mother raised her son alone. They were very poor. At first they lived by a cemetery, where the mother found her son imitating the paid mourners in funeral processions. Therefore the mother decided to move. The next house was near a market in the town. There the boy began to imitate the cries of merchants (merchants were despised in early China). So the mother moved to a house next to a school. Inspired by the scholars and students, Mencius began to study. His mother decided to remain, and Mencius became a scholar. This story means that nurture is more influenced than the nature.

A word of criminal also confirm my argument. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. 
Through these supports, It is proved that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

Counterpoising genetics and environmental influences is somewhat misleading, despite the partisan claims of people on each side. Many human traits and behaviors result from both genetic and environmental factors. Moreover, genetic and environmental influences on a trait are not simply additive. Genes “interact” with the environment. That is, genes provide the potential for a trait, but environmental conditions determine whether that potential will be realized. The same genetic codes may be expressed at different levels in different environments. Compare, for example, Asian immigrants in the United States to U.S.–born Asian Americans. U.S.–born Asians are twice as likely as immigrants to suffer from prostate cancer, and Asian-American adolescents born in the United States are more than twice as likely to be obese as Asian-American adolescents who recently immigrated to the United States. U.S.–born Asians and immigrant Asians are likely to have similar genetic predispositions for prostate cancer and obesity. The differences between the two groups in the prevalence of these disorders are, therefore, likely to be caused by environmental conditions such as lifestyle and diet. To understand gene-byenvironment
interactions, we must evaluate the estimated heritability of traits in particular environments. The term heritability is often misunderstood. The traditional twin study design generally produces a single heritability estimate. Heritability, however, is not a fixed property of a trait; it could vary from one population to another. For example, under different social circumstances, the heritability for cognitive development may differ. We could make one estimate of heritability based on a U.S. middle-class population and another based on a low-caste population in India. We would expect the former to be significantly larger than the latter. In a modern liberal democracy, individuals enjoy more access to educational opportunities than in a traditional aristocratic society. As a result, the differences in cognitive achievement in a modern democracy should be due more to genetic differences than in a traditional society. An egalitarian, democratic society can be thought of as a “normal” environment for estimating the heritability of cognitive development, where the “genetic potential” for cognitive development can be realized. We can compare heritability in a traditional or more hierarchical society against this potential.

Perhaps one of the challenges to discussing this topic is how to prove that the nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic. There is a related theory that proves my argument. Bandura's (1977) social learning theory states that aggression is a learnt from the environment through observation and imitation. This is seen in his famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). This saying refers to the legend that Mencius's mother moved house three times before finding a location that she felt was suitable for the child's upbringing. As an expression, the idiom refers to the importance of finding the proper environment for raising children. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. Through this supports, I think that nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

20117 이준우 Conclusion

Conclusion

Perhaps one of the challenges to discussing this topic is how to prove that the nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic. There is a related theory that proves my argument. Bandura's (1977) social learning theory states that aggression is a learnt from the environment through observation and imitation. This is seen in his famous bobo doll experiment (Bandura, 1961). This saying refers to the legend that Mencius's mother moved house three times before finding a location that she felt was suitable for the child's upbringing. As an expression, the idiom refers to the importance of finding the proper environment for raising children. Shinchangwon(신창원) is a criminal who is killed 7 people. He said, " Nation use a lot of money and armies to catch me, but, there is a way not to make me like this. When I studied in elementary school, My class teacher said that you don't have to study, if you don't have enough money, shut up and go away. Since my teacher said like that, in my mind, the evils started to appear. If the teacher gives me the love, I won't be here." It means that nurture changes him. Through this supports, I think that nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.

20117 이준우 Refutation and Concession

1. What is my thesis?
I think that Nurture plays more important role in shaping human behavior and characteristic.
2. What is the opposite position?
Nature is more important than nurture in shaping human behavior and characteristic.
3. What arguments can I anticipate?
Twins studies showing a strong IQ correlation between identical twins.
4. How will I counter those arguments?
It is not only nature but also nurture.

Counterpoising genetics and environmental influences is somewhat misleading, despite the partisan claims of people on each side. Many human traits and behaviors result from both genetic and environmental factors. Moreover, genetic and environmental influences on a trait are not simply additive. Genes “interact” with the environment. That is, genes provide the potential for a trait, but environmental conditions determine whether that potential will be realized. The same genetic codes may be expressed at different levels in different environments. Compare, for example, Asian immigrants in the United States to U.S.–born Asian Americans. U.S.–born Asians are twice as likely as immigrants to suffer from prostate cancer, and Asian-American adolescents born in the United States are more than twice as likely to be obese as Asian-American adolescents who recently immigrated to the United States. U.S.–born Asians and immigrant Asians are likely to have similar genetic predispositions for prostate cancer and obesity. The differences between the two groups in the prevalence of these disorders are, therefore, likely to be caused by environmental conditions such as lifestyle and diet. To understand gene-byenvironment
interactions, we must evaluate the estimated heritability of traits in particular environments. The term heritability is often misunderstood. The traditional twin study design generally produces a single heritability estimate. Heritability, however, is not a fixed property of a trait; it could vary from one population to another. For example, under different social circumstances, the heritability for cognitive development may differ. We could make one estimate of heritability based on a U.S. middle-class population and another based on a low-caste population in India. We would expect the former to be significantly larger than the latter. In a modern liberal democracy, individuals enjoy more access to educational opportunities than in a traditional aristocratic society. As a result, the differences in cognitive achievement in a modern democracy should be due more to genetic differences than in a traditional society. An egalitarian, democratic society can be thought of as a “normal” environment for estimating the heritability of cognitive development, where the “genetic potential” for cognitive development can be realized. We can compare heritability in a traditional or more hierarchical society against this potential.