Peer Evaluation 20120 조윤지

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점을 주고 싶다. 굉장히 잘 짜여진 구조와 논리를 가지고 있는 글이다. 

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
Great essay. but your argument is not persuasive. I think it is just argument.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
 I think that personality is partly innate, not entirely acquired.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
I think,....not....:)
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
I think personality is innate or acquired.
Any other thoughts?
nope

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
yes
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
yesDoes the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
yes
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
yes
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
yes


What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I dont have it

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
disagree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
disagree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
nope, just my mind is so hard to change

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
the essay was good.


Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
yes

Are the sources obvious?
yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes


Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
nope